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"A dream"
 
   I am looking up at you. I look slowly up from your red toenails and those very sexy shoes, up your magnificent legs, stopping at that lacey black thong, then up your corset, up to where I can glimpse your bosom overflowing, up to your perfect face. You are smiling and you are shifting your weight from side to side and sometimes, with a wicked look in your eyes you lean back so your weight goes to your heels and they dig into my skin, my chest. You laugh when you do that because you know it hurts me and you know I love it. Despite the pain, I say nothing, perhaps a small moan escapes my lips, but my eyes show you I am excited by the perverse combination of looking happily and with such pleasure at such loveliness and experiencing sharp, piercing pain at the same time. You understand my mind is spinning, and you know you have complete control just by shifting your weight. It is so hot in this room, and your sweat falls from your lip, and I try, but fail, to catch it in my mouth. I know it is precious, it is salty and sweet at the same time but most importantly it is yours, it is a gift from your body, it is part of you that you give to me to drink. It is better than any wine because it is from you. One drop lands close, on my cheek, and I reach for it with my tongue and I am rewarded. There is a glow of perspiration on your long legs and I cannot help but stare at the occasional drop that rolls down your thigh, and then slowly across your knee and down towards me along your shin. I am mesmerized as one finds its way to your foot, slipping into your shoe alongside your ankle. I desire it. I want it. I want to suck it off your foot. But it disappears inside. Your shoes are close enough to my face on my chest that I smell the leather, I smell your skin, your perfume, your sweat, I am getting high from the excitement, the pleasure of finally having you on me, the pain of your heels, the sound of your laughter, the sight of your beauty. I am dizzy, and I am obsessed, I want that drop of sweat. I reach for your foot, your shoe, and I stop before I touch it. You are in control and if you do not want me to be so bold you may lean back hard and send pain deep into my soul. I hesitate with my hand a few inches from your foot and I wait, and hope you will tell me it is okay. I wait, and you say nothing. I wait and my hunger, my thirst grows. I lick my lips. You laugh and smile and nod, yes! I touch your ankle gently, you lift your foot and move it closer to my face, all your weight now on the other shoe, the other heel. I am getting crazy inside, the pain coupled with the unspeakable excitement of the slow movement towards my face of your shoe and that lovely foot within it and that drop of sweat in there, somewhere. I begin to pull off your shoe, checking your eyes for approval. Seeing no command to stop, I remove your shoe. You raise an arm to steady yourself against the wall. Your other heel bites into me. I am stabbed, I am delirious. I take your unshoed foot in both my hands and look hungrily for that drop of your golden sweat. I do not see it, but my thirst is unbearable. I begin to kiss, to lick, to gently bite the bottom of your foot. I hear, or at least dream I hear, a moan from you. I gently spread your toes with my fingers, and my tongue slides by those red nails,between your toes, and I flick it and press it and now I know I hear you. You push your foot down and I open my mouth, taking care to cover my teeth, and you force all your toes into my mouth and I suck and lick it. I hear you, my eyes close, I am gentle. You are pleased, I hope.

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1. "RE: A dream"
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   You have stumbled off of me because of my kissing your foot, and you have scratched me with a heel across my chest, drawing blood. It seems I may have cut you with my teeth as you twisted off of me. You look at me fiercely as you step back onto my chest, making clear by the twisting of each heel that you do not expect me to place you into an unsteady position again. You use your left spike heel to trace something across my chest and stomach, taking some of your blood, my blood, to use as your ink. You step backward with each foot so that now your weight is on my stomach, you tell me it is too soft, that you need to find something harder to step on. You look behind you and down, and then back at me and you smile and laugh. You turn to the side and with your right shoe on my stomach lift your left and put your heel on the head of my cock. You do not look where you step, you want me to know you don't care if it hurts and you look at me, eyes to eyes, and you press down. I gasp, and try not to cry out, I do not want you to think I am unworthy. You laugh as you lean on it, I cannot bear the pain, but I love the pain. I need the pain because you give it to me. You lift your heel off my cock and place the sole of your shoe instead upon it, you push down with half your weight, you watch my eyes fill with fear and you hear me hold my breath, you smile and lean more and lift your right shoe up and off my stomach, laughing as you note the angry red impression left in my skin by your heel and all your wight is on your shoe on my cock. My eyes flutter, I hold my breath, I do not moan, I do not gasp, I fight. My eyes roll up, and you ask me if I like this and I nod. I love this, I need this, I crave this, I say. Then you cannot have it, you laugh and you step back onto my chest with both heels. My mind spins. You lift your left foot and place it an inch over my face. You move your foot so that the heel hovers close to my eyes, my cheeks, your other heel sinking deeply into my chest. "Open," you say and I comply. "Suck," you say as you push your heel into my mouth. I do. "Careful," you say, "If you scratch the leather om my heel with your teeth, I will punish you very severely." I suck gently on your heel, looking up at the sole of your shoe, which flattens my nose and presses on my forehead. Again, I am crazed, the pain of the other heel, unmoving, just digging deeper into my skin as most of your weight is upon it. "Don't gag on it," you say and you lift it out of me mouth. "Now," you say. "Now, it is time for you to pleasure me," as you step off and then straddle me, your glorious ass on my chest, your pussy close to my face. "This won't do," you say, as you shift and straighten your legs so my head is now between your thighs. "Place your hands above your head," you direct, as you bend your knees and put a heel on each palm. "There," you say, "That's better." Your panties are before my eyes, your breasts in your corset are so close I can see the sweat on that magnificent flesh, your thighs press the side of my face and you shift ever so closer to my mouth, your heels digging quite painfully into my palms as you momentarily place much of your weight on them and you move. I cannot explain or describe my feelings, my mind careens between explosion and darkness, I smell you, I feel you, I am under that ass, your crotch close enough to press with extended tongue, but I dare not. You laugh about whether you should have drunk that second margarita. You take your hand and move aside your thong and you show me yourself. Less than an inch separates my mouth and you. The pressure on my chest, the fact that your ass, your warmth, your weight is sitting on my chest, a situation which I ordinarily would pray, indeed would pay, to experience, fades from consciousness. The pain in my palms, so biting and savage, means nothing to me. All I want is to taste you, to collect a single drop of you on my tongue, to press against you, to spread you open with my tongue, to explore inside you, to feel your heat. You move your hand away and re-adjust your thong. You laugh and lean back and reach behind to find my cock. "Just checking," you say. And you squeeze it, with surprising strength, you squeeze it. I am losing any sense of where I am, your weight, the pain, your smell, the sight of you, so close, your laughs, your smiles as you sit there on my chest with my hands pinned under your heels, your thighs grazing my face, your eyes looking at me, teasing me, your thong so close, my hunger, my need to taste you, I am losing myself. "I think I need to pee," you say.

Please, please, please, ask me to drink.

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2. "RE: A dream"
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   A line has been crossed. Other women have "dominated" me, others have stepped on me in heels, or sat upon me and perhaps pinched or bit a nipple, some even sat on my face, covering my mouth and nose with their bottoms, and counted out loud, laughing to see how long I could go without breathing, but they have been play-acting, they have been doing something they read or saw somewhere, they have been playing, they have been fooling around. None has been the Goddess you are. None has taken me, none has owned me, no woman has pierced me so. When you stood straight up, your heels with your full weight digging into my palms, the soles of your shoes pressing on my fingers, a line was crossed. Such pain I have never felt before. A line has been crossed. I am in the deepest physical agony ever, my hands are on fire, it is unbearably painful, you actually now truly torture me... This you know, this you understand, this you, ... this you enjoy. You smile, I stare, I do not know what to do. I cannot move, I am paralyzed. I am in awe. I am losing sanity. Minutes before, despite the heat, despite the pain of your heels on my chest, the taste of the leather as you forced your heel into my mouth, despite the glory of your weight on my chest as you sat, teasing me with your beauty, with your body so close to my mouth, despite all of that I was capable of moments of lucidity, I was able to recognize that, while we were playing with fire, we were playing. I understood we were indulging each other's fantasies, I came in and out of euphoria and felt good and satisfied and aroused and oh so happy that we finally were together and finally pleasuring each other and finally enjoying each other's craziness. But this, this searing, unbearable, completely new insane level of pain, with you standing with your heels digging straight down through my palms, with your full weight concentrated on my hands, this is I now realize, this is something new. This is a complete loss of control. I am now in new territory. I cannot even ask you to move, I do not not even know, I cannot even decide, if I want you to move, I am transfixed, I am immobile, I am unable to even think. I feel, but there is no thought. My eyes tear from the agony, but I can see clearly enough to see that you are looking down and you are smiling. You are smiling, and you know, you simply must know, that you have gone further than we planned, further than we discussed, further than I dreamed. You are smiling at my suffering. You no longer are playing. You also have crossed a line, I believe you now are someone else, you are somewhere else. You no longer are playing. You are serious about causing me to experience something new. You feel the power, the raw strength, the total dominant control you now have attained. You know how I am suffering, you know the intense hot pain you can cause by the merest shift in your balance, the slightest lean side to side, back to front, it is torture now, it causes my eyes to react, you know fully how much you are hurting me and yet, you do it, you do shift your weight, you see the fear, the ecstasy, the madness in my eyes, and you smile. You too are exploring new territory, for you never before have been completely, wholly, unquestionably in control. We both know a line has been crossed. I am unable to step back, and you do not wish to. I cannot speak, I cannot even moan at this point. I actually feel I may lose consciousness. I am in awe of you. I worship you, you are my Goddess. You sit down on my chest, never removing your heels from their slots, their holes in my hands. You simply sit down and, while the pain lessens a bit because your full weight no longer is on your heels, the pain does not leave. I am in awe, I am somewhere else, I am not here and yet I have never been so present. There is no escape and I seek no escape. I never have been so without free will, so helpless, so close to floating away, to leaving my body, and I do not want it to end. I am anchored here by your heels, by the pain. I have never been so much in pain, and I am loving it because it is the most burning, most exquisite, most real most intense physical feeling I ever have experienced. I have never been so completely lost, and nobody ever before has found me like this. Your body shimmers before me, your thong, on which I attempt to fix, to focus, is so close I believe I see heat waves between my face and your crotch,. I am becoming delirious. I have no ability to speak, to murmur, even to open my mouth if you moved close enough to touch with my tongue I would be incapable. I am losing myself and I am dissolving into you. There is nothing else for me, nothing I can focus on, all there is, is you. I know only that you are my Goddess and that my hands are on fire and that my chest is under one of the most beautiful instruments of torture, of bliss, ever created, your ass. I am in and out. My eyes are lsoing the ability to focus, I am not sure if it is becuase of the tears from the pain or the fact that my mind has become unhinged. But feel you lift off of my chest, and my chest weeps for its loss, but my hands signal new pain, new torture, new blinding agony as you stand again upon them. But wait, something is happening. You are leaning down at me, you are lifting my head and sliding something under it, you have something in your hands, something long and sinister. I do not know what it is, I do not know what is happening. You are smiling, I can see that. Now you are laughing and you are saying something but I cannot make out the words. Something is around my neck and your hands are doing something. I feel pressure, an odd pressure, it is my neck, something is encircling my neck and it,..and it, ... it is getting tighter. Oh my God, you have tied something around my neck and you are tightening it as you lean back again on my palms. This is new. This is unrecognizable. It is getting foggy, darker, quieter. I cannot move my hands, of course I cannot, they are pinned, nailed to the floor, they are burning and cannot be moved. I hear you laugh, but it seems far away. My sense of smell seems intact, I smell your sweat, your leather, I smell blood, mine? yours? does it matter anymore? I smell you, musky and sweet and powerful, I smell everything. I smell what is left of your perfume after you sweated most of it off. I do not know why I can smell, I do not think I can breathe, yet I can smell, all else is fading, is it smell or is it memories of smells? I am in bliss, I am in your hands, I am yours.

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3. "RE: A dream"
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   ... not a single commment. Now, that is humiliation at its finest. Oh well.


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4. "RE: A dream"
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Nice really nice but too long- keep it short dear- but all and all wonerful.

Dakota:)

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5. "RE: A dream"
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   Thank you for reading and posting.

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6. "RE: A dream"
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   I've thought about commenting a couple of times and haven't because anyone that actually sits down, writes and publishes has my admiration. So, trying to be constructive and not a dick...

I think that your initial problem is formatting - lack of white space. There's no place for the eye to rest due to the lack of paragraph breaks or even line breaks after spoken text. Every time I tried to read it I'd lose my place after a couple of lines and have to work entirely too hard to find it again. What they call a 'Wall Of Text'.

This is very subjective so I may well be out of order but I found that the staccato rhythm (lots of short sentences one after the other) tended to break the flow of my reading. Now I can see how this might be a deliberate artifice showing the stream of consciousness in a dream but I still found it very distracting from a readability standpoint.

All the best,
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7. "RE: A dream"
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sailorgirl, aka Mz Amber


really creative, but to long to read, eyes got tired...

i did get excited when the pain started, let me induce some pain unto you my darling,especially that flicking tongue onto the shoes....i feel like squeezing it...hee hee


"not everyone has to be nice"

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8. "Edited for some breaks"
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   A line has been crossed. Other women have "dominated" me, others have stepped on me in heels, or sat upon me and perhaps pinched or bit a nipple, some even sat on my face, covering my mouth and nose with their bottoms, and counted out loud, laughing to see how long I could go without breathing, but they have been play-acting, they have been doing something they read or saw somewhere, they have been playing, they have been fooling around. None has been the Goddess you are. None has taken me, none has owned me, no woman has pierced me so.

When you stood straight up, your heels with your full weight digging into my palms, the soles of your shoes pressing on my fingers, a line was crossed. Such pain I have never felt before. A line has been crossed. I am in the deepest physical agony ever, my hands are on fire, it is unbearably painful, you actually now truly torture me... This you know, this you understand, this you, ... this you enjoy. You smile, I stare, I do not know what to do. I cannot move, I am paralyzed. I am in awe. I am losing sanity.

Minutes before, despite the heat, despite the pain of your heels on my chest, the taste of the leather as you forced your heel into my mouth, despite the glory of your weight on my chest as you sat, teasing me with your beauty, with your body so close to my mouth, despite all of that I was capable of moments of lucidity, I was able to recognize that, while we were playing with fire, we were playing. I understood we were indulging each other's fantasies, I came in and out of euphoria and felt good and satisfied and aroused and oh so happy that we finally were together and finally pleasuring each other and finally enjoying each other's craziness.

But this, this searing, unbearable, completely new insane level of pain, with you standing with your heels digging straight down through my palms, with your full weight concentrated on my hands, this is I now realize, this is something new. This is a complete loss of control. I am now in new territory. I cannot even ask you to move, I do not not even know, I cannot even decide, if I want you to move, I am transfixed, I am immobile, I am unable to even think. I feel, but there is no thought.

My eyes tear from the agony, but I can see clearly enough to see that you are looking down and you are smiling. You are smiling, and you know, you simply must know, that you have gone further than we planned, further than we discussed, further than I dreamed.

You are smiling at my suffering. You no longer are playing. You also have crossed a line, I believe you now are someone else, you are somewhere else. You no longer are playing. You are serious about causing me to experience something new.

You feel the power, the raw strength, the total dominant control you now have attained. You know how I am suffering, you know the intense hot pain you can cause by the merest shift in your balance, the slightest lean side to side, back to front, it is torture now, it causes my eyes to react, you know fully how much you are hurting me and yet, you do it, you do shift your weight, you see the fear, the ecstasy, the madness in my eyes, and you smile. You too are exploring new territory, for you never before have been completely, wholly, unquestionably in control.

We both know a line has been crossed. I am unable to step back, and you do not wish to. I cannot speak, I cannot even moan at this point. I actually feel I may lose consciousness. I am in awe of you. I worship you, you are my Goddess.

You sit down on my chest, never removing your heels from their slots, their holes in my hands. You simply sit down and, while the pain lessens a bit because your full weight no longer is on your heels, the pain does not leave. I am in awe, I am somewhere else, I am not here and yet I have never been so present.

There is no escape and I seek no escape. I never have been so without free will, so helpless, so close to floating away, to leaving my body, and I do not want it to end. I am anchored here by your heels, by the pain. I have never been so much in pain, and I am loving it because it is the most burning, most exquisite, most real most intense physical feeling I ever have experienced. I have never been so completely lost, and nobody ever before has found me like this.

Your body shimmers before me, your thong, on which I attempt to fix, to focus, is so close I believe I see heat waves between my face and your crotch,. I am becoming delirious. I have no ability to speak, to murmur, even to open my mouth if you moved close enough to touch with my tongue I would be incapable. I am losing myself and I am dissolving into you.

There is nothing else for me, nothing I can focus on, all there is, is you. I know only that you are my Goddess and that my hands are on fire and that my chest is under one of the most beautiful instruments of torture, of bliss, ever created, your ass. I am in and out. My eyes are lsoing the ability to focus, I am not sure if it is becuase of the tears from the pain or the fact that my mind has become unhinged. But feel you lift off of my chest, and my chest weeps for its loss, but my hands signal new pain, new torture, new blinding agony as you stand again upon them. But wait, something is happening.

You are leaning down at me, you are lifting my head and sliding something under it, you have something in your hands, something long and sinister. I do not know what it is, I do not know what is happening. You are smiling, I can see that. Now you are laughing and you are saying something but I cannot make out the words.

Something is around my neck and your hands are doing something. I feel pressure, an odd pressure, it is my neck, something is encircling my neck and it,..and it, ... it is getting tighter. Oh my God, you have tied something around my neck and you are tightening it as you lean back again on my palms.

This is new. This is unrecognizable. It is getting foggy, darker, quieter. I cannot move my hands, of course I cannot, they are pinned, nailed to the floor, they are burning and cannot be moved. I hear you laugh, but it seems far away.

My sense of smell seems intact, I smell your sweat, your leather, I smell blood, mine? yours? does it matter anymore? I smell you, musky and sweet and powerful, I smell everything. I smell what is left of your perfume after you sweated most of it off. I do not know why I can smell, I do not think I can breathe, yet I can smell, all else is fading, is it smell or is it memories of smells?

I am in bliss, I am in your hands, I am yours.

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9. "RE: Edited for some breaks"
In response to message #8
 
   This is a very moving extreme fantasy. Thanks for both parts you have posted.

I agree with some other comments that it would help to break the narrative into smaller paragraphs.

This is a quick try at doing this for the second part only.

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10. "RE: Edited for some breaks"
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   Ahhhhhhhhh, an editor! Thanks everyone for the comments. It definitely was written as, and intended to be, a stream of delirious consciousness. But, I understand that might not have translated well.

And, sailor girl, I am glad you as womean got a little excited too....

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11. "RE: A dream"
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How do you talk so much with my toes in your mouth?

hehe, hush up and keep licking

The Goddess Athena

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12. "RE: A dream"
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   Wow Goddess, i am sorry i missed Your reply. I just looked at Your pictures and that would be an awesome experience..

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